> I am a ... left-brained neurosis (did you mean 'neurotic?' not sure what this means) diet regimented monk (did you mean 'diet regiment monk'? not sure what this means) zealous disruptive product fiend (did you mean 'zealous fiend for disruptive products'? not sure what this means).

> "All of the above is far too subjective to have any empirical value. So, here is a quick and porous synopsis of my "experience" over the years"

This would read better without the disclaimer, flowery words, and air quotes, e.g.: "Here is a summary of my limited experiences"

> "Age 11 (as far back as I can recall in my life)"

Really? Anyway, why is this important? This whole paragraph would be better if you left out the commentary: "Age 11 - Discovered that I could ping youtube.com and use the resulting IP to get around my school's DNS blocking. I didn't really know what I was doing, but I knew what I wanted to do with the rest of my life."

Also, phrases like "my technology inception" stick out like a sore thumb and will make you sound grandiose, regardless of how many disclaimers you include.

> Eight months later, my port-forwarded router became an LLC with 6 full-time employees.

I know what you are trying to do here, but unless you really mean that your router had business papers and employees better keep it simple, especially since this is a story about how you took money from people to run a business whose operations were highly dubious at best.

> Meanwhile, my grades in all but anything STEM were an abysmal.

This is the kind of error you'll catch if you read your prose aloud carefully. Also, "to the demise of the business and the other employees" makes it sound like your mother killed them. I think you meant 'dismay'. Normally I would not comment on these kinds of things, but since you asked...

Your surprise that your your style is attracting more attention than your ideas is another thing that you'll eventually grow out of as you age and learn more about human behavior. In part it's because people feel smart when they notice things; anything that is simply asserted by you will be immediately suspect and scrutinized against other information, namely your other works and overall tone.

This is not unfair, it's actually a big part of communication. You transmitted more information than you intended, and that has business implications.

This is constructive feedback. Thank you for taking your time to do this. What should I do to improve the letter's overall organization of ideas?

Probably because your writing grates people the wrong way. It's almost cringe worthy because I'm sure lots of Hacker News readers were on forums at a young age and wanted to impress someone or sound clever by adding unnecessarily "big" words, who would look back and feel like slapping their past selves for doing that. At this point, you sound like ForTheWolfX, a self proclaimed child prodigy who once posted on reddit boasting a about his intelligence (not that I'm saying you are) and gave advice to people about things he had no experience in, such as long term relationships. the boy was like 16 years old and thought he was in the perfect relationship that was 100% going to last forever. It's childish.

The simple truth is you've put alot of time into thinking about how to look smart, and it shows. Just relax a bit and solve the problems in front of you and your natural intelligence will show, naturally.

Thank you for your input. I'm curious; do you think if I omitted my age I would be receiving far less vitriol and accusations of being pretentious?

> Lastly, to comment, I am very curious to know why I am receiving more feedback on my style of writing rather than the ideas I am attempting to communicate.

From your post: "Invest in me, not my ideas."

As it so happens, your writing style says a lot about you.